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Mikecom

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Post Fri Jan 14, 2011 12:34 am

mikecom haypi story

on a distant beach far away there was a small sea port and it was ran by a mighty leader one day the great leader was walking across the rocky beach when the ground collapsed under his/her feet the powerful leader had fallen deep in to the earth when he/she woke they saw 8 cloaked beings surrounding a great door the door was massive in size and had one marking that resembled a key slot the 8 beings formed around the leader and said "the great door had many powers and only a true leader can open it" they told him each relic held a piece to a great key then explained that the relics had been spread across the depths of the ocean floor and each being had a relic to protect they casted mighty spells to protect the relics from unworthy men will u be worthy enough to find the mighty key that posses great power are will u fall to the wrath of the unforgiving sea now as the leader ponders what he/she must do he looks onto his small trading ship which will help him/her trade to become the richest and most powerful leader in the world and how you find untold fortune your submarine is key to finding the greatest treasures the world has ever seen dive deep into the dark ocean to find the relics the world is searching for will you be the first to complete the great adventure
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Mikecom

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Post Fri Jan 14, 2011 8:19 pm

Re: mikecom haypi story

Comment Plz I need feedback :)
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Scapucino

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Post Fri Jan 14, 2011 9:26 pm

Re: mikecom haypi story

lol funny ending and some mistakes but nice lol
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Pkowner

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Post Fri Jan 14, 2011 9:27 pm

Re: mikecom haypi story

Epic Funny :D
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Scapucino

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Post Fri Jan 14, 2011 9:46 pm

Re: mikecom haypi story

if u do a continueation (u rushed the ending with the modern stuff) and get rid of mistakes then it would be a cool and funny little story
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Pkowner

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Post Fri Jan 14, 2011 9:47 pm

Re: mikecom haypi story

Scapucino wrote:if u do a continueation and get rid of mistakes then it would be a cool and funny little story


Yes i will hear more please !
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Mikecom

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Post Fri Jan 14, 2011 10:57 pm

Re: mikecom haypi story

so u guys think i should add more
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Post Sun Jan 16, 2011 10:30 am

Re: mikecom haypi story

No its stupid
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